To look, to stand — a place
where pause is made, or
where one stands nearer. How
closely, near touching, tangles:
silver than — danger
than — foster than — harbor
than most dearly and troubled.
None that say swollen. None
that say whistles. None that
say wand'ring. None that say
bramble, and none
that say nothing at all. No —
slipped and squalled and no
nearer than that.
[ADDENDUM: My use of this blog has demonstrated that I'm unable to leave a poem alone once I've put it up. As such I've decided to start recording my edits — like errata slips, but where the errata described are my own, rather than a publisher's.
In this instance:
where pause is made, or
where one stands nearer. How
closely, near touching, tangles:
silver than — danger
than — foster than — harbor
than most dearly and troubled.
None that say swollen. None
that say whistles. None that
say wand'ring. None that say
bramble, and none
that say nothing at all. No —
slipped and squalled and no
nearer than that.
[ADDENDUM: My use of this blog has demonstrated that I'm unable to leave a poem alone once I've put it up. As such I've decided to start recording my edits — like errata slips, but where the errata described are my own, rather than a publisher's.
In this instance:
• the last sentence (in the final three lines) was added a few minutes after publication.
• the positions of "harbor" and "danger" have been reversed
• in the last sentence, "No" was earlier "O."
• line breaks have been revised; the end words before the afternoon of 5/14 were: is | nearer. | tangles: | foster | dearly | None | wand'- | none | slipped | that.]
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